I could (and to myself will *g*) quibble about errors and typos and a bit too much telling in places that (for me) deflates the intensity Ah, but you've said it out loud to us now as well, so please do explain where you reckon it does this - always interesting to chat about fic!
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Date: Friday, 6 August 2010 12:35 pm (UTC)Ah, but you've said it out loud to us now as well, so please do explain where you reckon it does this - always interesting to chat about fic!